2013年2月16日雅思写作范文

　　写作思路： 动态图表，按照时间顺序描述趋势，按照factor的顺序做对比。

　　大作文 ：Some people think all lawbreakers should be taken into prison, others believe that there are better alternatives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

　　写作思路：

　　第一段： 如果对待罪犯：监狱还是其他措施?

　　第二段： 监狱的作用

　　1. 保证社会安全

　　2. 警示他人

　　但是：耗费资源多，罪犯出狱后难以重新进入社会

　　第三段： 其他措施包括教育，职业培训，工作

　　1. 可以帮助出狱后经济独立，防止重复犯罪

　　2. 认识到自己对社会的价值，提高自尊自信

　　第四段： 我不否认监狱的作用，但是如果没有教育和工作的帮助，罪犯难以彻底得到改造。

　　As repeated crimes occur increasingly, how to reform criminals has given rise to a debate. Certainly prison is the place for them to be punished and reformed. But other measures are also needed to achieve an optimal¹ result for them and the society as well.

　　It is undeniable that putting criminals into prison would contribute to a lower crime rate.Primarily, as offenders² are isolated⁴ from the society when they are in prison, they cannot threaten the social security any more. Longer prison term would also be a serious warning forpotential criminals However, this way of punishment means that more prisons and man power as well as other resources are required, which can be a huge cost for the government. Besides, after being isolated from the society for a really long time, offenders would find it very hard to re-entrythe society and this may force them to commit crime again.

　　Hence, it is better to find alternative ways to deal with criminals. Vocational training and academic education aimed at prisoners are promising⁵ ones. These measures could help equip those behind bars with job skills and become independent economically after they are set free. They would find the opportunity to escape the cycle of violence and poverty utterly⁶. For those criminals with special talents, working is a better way to reform them because they may have chance to realize their value to the society and regain⁷ self-respect and self-confidence. Theseapproaches would make a difference in criminal rehabilitation⁸, and generate a better effect than simply throwing offenders behind the iron bars.

　　Overall, I do not deny the function of prison in punishing felons¹⁰ and deterring¹² crime. However this cannot turn them into law abiding¹³ members without the aid of other measures, such as education, training and working.

　　词汇拓展：

　　1. occur 发生

　　2. reform 改造

　　3. given rise to 引起

　　4. optimal 最佳的

　　5. undeniable 不可否认的

　　6. crime rate 犯罪率

　　7. contribute to 导致

　　8. Primarily 主要的是

　　9. Offender= those behind bars= felon⁹ 罪犯

　　10. Isolate³ 隔离

　　11. prison term 刑期

　　12. security 安全

　　13. warn 敬告

　　14. potential 潜在的，可能的

　　15. re-entry 重新进入

　　16. commit crime 犯罪

　　17. law abiding 遵守法律

　　18. alternative 其他的

　　19. deal with 应对

　　20. Vocational training 职业教育

　　21. promising 有希望的

　　22. measure 措施

　　23. set free 释放

　　24. escape 逃脱

　　25. cycle 循环

　　26. utterly 彻底地

　　27. regain 重新获得

　　28. approach 方法

　　29. make a difference 有作用

　　30. rehabilitation 改过迁善

　　31. generate 产生

　　32. deter¹¹ 阻止

　　33. turn …into 把…变成

　　34. Hence 因此

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